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Post by Feroin on Aug 22, 2008 18:16:02 GMT -5
A shining silver dragon flew out of the water, "That was amazing!" comes the unusually high voice of the dragon. "Yes that was," says the elven rider on the back "I never thought of using that spell in that sense, breathing underwater... it's amazing." "What should we do now Feroin?" says the dragon "I don't know" he says as he heaves up a big bag of diamonds "I didn't actually believe there were diamonds here" "Why not? this is in fact Tirenkord, the diamond reef." "I know, but really... i thought that was a misdemeanor" ((fixed for fury  )) |
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Post by Fury on Aug 22, 2008 18:47:13 GMT -5
(We do not asterisk roleplay here. We capitalize the letters, use proper grammar, and use correct punctuation. Your post should look more like:
A shining silver dragon flew out of the water. "That was amazing!" it exclaimed in its unusually high voice.... continue writing like that.)
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Post by Feroin on Aug 22, 2008 22:36:58 GMT -5
((lets try this again))
"Heh," said a tired Feroin.
"What?"
"It's just these diamonds, they don't seem right to me."
The white dragon leaned over Feroins' shoulder and said, "They look fine to me."
"That's cause you eyes are too bulgy, they take up all the brain space." Feroin said with a laugh.
"Hey! They are not! They are perfectly sized for a dragon."
"Well you aren't a dragon, your hardly the size of me, hah! I can't believe the elves called you Silverteeth, you aren't scary at all. Whitehorn fits you better." he said with another laugh. "Well we had better get going." he says as he mounts Whitehorn and flies towards the Fang Claw Mountain.
"Were you drunk or something?" said Whitehorn after about an hour of flying.
"I don't know. I just lost myself, I am sorry it won't happen again."
((fixed for errors thanks fury))
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Post by Fury on Aug 23, 2008 10:28:54 GMT -5
(Getting a little better. Your characters cannot be in two places at once, so you must either give up this thread or the one at Fang Claw. Please RP in this style from now on... oh and RP's are always in past tense. You should not say 'leans', you should say 'The white dragon leaned over Feroin's shoulder'. You have 'said' correct, but your tenses need to match. So you must use past tense for all.)
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Post by Feroin on Aug 23, 2008 12:57:16 GMT -5
((i did. i said i flew towards fang claw mountain, and i haven't done anything here since))
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Post by Fury on Aug 23, 2008 14:17:39 GMT -5
(alright. I hadn't noticed, I apologize.)
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